Write a story or episode of suspense, in which a character enters a room and finds that it has been disturbed and may even still be occupied by the intruder.
Fred Harris locked his gate, that of his villa and stepped into his car. His boss had called him for a meeting.
Things had always been like that. He had always cancelled his rendezvous because of this man who always had suggestions and brainwaves to inform his employees about.
He drove to his office with heavy eyelids and fatigue taking over him. The night was pitch-black complicating visibility.
His boss simply told them about a project for better relationships with customers. “Couldn’t this have waited till tomorrow,” Fred thought sleepily. He found himself at his front gate at 2:30am. He unlocked it and entered before unlocking the front door.
He switched the light on and raised his brows in astonishment to see how messy it was. His furniture was scratched and the glass he had left on his kitchen counter lay broken on the floor and the milk drunk-up.
This was bizarre, too bizarre. Then, he heard a noise coming from his room. He walked past a window and noticed that he had left it open. He closed it and went on to his room, to notice that it was even more disarranged.
His bed’s mattress had been scratched out and his bedsheet was touching the floor. One of his pillows was on the floor and his nightstand had been knocked over and broken. Then, he saw the pillow on his bed move slightly.
It was certain now, whatever it was that was in here was under there. He held his breath, knocked the pillow in another direction and stepped back.
He laughed aloud when he saw that it was only a cat, a stray certainly, that had been looking for food and warmth.
He stroked its fur and it purred. He fell asleep next to it. Who knew, he’d probably adopt it!
(CIE IGCSE Standards) Principal Examiner’s report:
Content: 7
Writing: 7
Grade: C
Question 2 showed the candidate in a more confident light, controlling a narrative competently. The story of suspense was straightforward, perhaps with opportunities missed for development, but with a more than competent structure, complete with a neat and credible ending. There was occasional clumsiness in the expression, but sentence structure was essentially sound, maintained by satisfactory punctuation and organisation.
Overall, the candidate’s performance was quite competent throughout and merited the placing on the C grade boundary.
Fred Harris locked his gate, that of his villa and stepped into his car. His boss had called him for a meeting.
Things had always been like that. He had always cancelled his rendezvous because of this man who always had suggestions and brainwaves to inform his employees about.
He drove to his office with heavy eyelids and fatigue taking over him. The night was pitch-black complicating visibility.
His boss simply told them about a project for better relationships with customers. “Couldn’t this have waited till tomorrow,” Fred thought sleepily. He found himself at his front gate at 2:30am. He unlocked it and entered before unlocking the front door.
He switched the light on and raised his brows in astonishment to see how messy it was. His furniture was scratched and the glass he had left on his kitchen counter lay broken on the floor and the milk drunk-up.
This was bizarre, too bizarre. Then, he heard a noise coming from his room. He walked past a window and noticed that he had left it open. He closed it and went on to his room, to notice that it was even more disarranged.
His bed’s mattress had been scratched out and his bedsheet was touching the floor. One of his pillows was on the floor and his nightstand had been knocked over and broken. Then, he saw the pillow on his bed move slightly.
It was certain now, whatever it was that was in here was under there. He held his breath, knocked the pillow in another direction and stepped back.
He laughed aloud when he saw that it was only a cat, a stray certainly, that had been looking for food and warmth.
He stroked its fur and it purred. He fell asleep next to it. Who knew, he’d probably adopt it!
(CIE IGCSE Standards) Principal Examiner’s report:
Content: 7
Writing: 7
Grade: C
Question 2 showed the candidate in a more confident light, controlling a narrative competently. The story of suspense was straightforward, perhaps with opportunities missed for development, but with a more than competent structure, complete with a neat and credible ending. There was occasional clumsiness in the expression, but sentence structure was essentially sound, maintained by satisfactory punctuation and organisation.
Overall, the candidate’s performance was quite competent throughout and merited the placing on the C grade boundary.
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