Equality is a dream – it can never be a reality.’ What do you think? You may focus on one specific area of equality – such as gender or wealth – or deal with the topic more generally.
I completely agree as well as disagree with this statement. This statement’s opinion may vary from place to place in different fields.
In a village equality is a dream as people are discriminated on the basis of case, creed, colour, sex, religion. Small children get beaten up by their parents if they play with people of different caste. If a husband dies the widow is also burned with him. Ladies have to cover their faces and walk.
Both the genders are never treated equally though they should be but they are not. Women after getting married in village and small towns are only left as housewife. Boys usually attend full school till they are graduated but girls are usually withdrawn as they know later she only has to work as a house wife. The rich are becoming more rich and the poor are becoming poorer day by day. The rich people rule over poor people as if they are the kings.
I even think if people understand the importance of everyone treated equally with equal respect that day is not far when both men and women are walking together towards success and we have already made a start.
Nowdays women have gone into politics and earlier only men were able to go to space but now in every mission even women are included. People have gained more and more respect for women for example as now in a local bus some seats are already reserved for ladies.
When men can work in factories even women can and they are in multinational companies as they have the same willpower and can do anything which men can. Rich and poor should also be treated equal as no matter if sumone doesn’t have money but he has a heart and should be respected equally as rich people as these are only people who have made our lives much more easier.
(CIE IGCSE Standards) Principal Examiner’s report:
Content: 4
Writing: 4
Grade: E
In question 2, the rate of errors is again high, and the unplanned nature of the writing is advertised by the opening statement ‘I completely agree as well as disagree.’ Development of points is by no means always logical, with paragraphs used only for obvious divisions. There is a definite understanding of gender equality issues, but expression and content are both highly flawed.
I completely agree as well as disagree with this statement. This statement’s opinion may vary from place to place in different fields.
In a village equality is a dream as people are discriminated on the basis of case, creed, colour, sex, religion. Small children get beaten up by their parents if they play with people of different caste. If a husband dies the widow is also burned with him. Ladies have to cover their faces and walk.
Both the genders are never treated equally though they should be but they are not. Women after getting married in village and small towns are only left as housewife. Boys usually attend full school till they are graduated but girls are usually withdrawn as they know later she only has to work as a house wife. The rich are becoming more rich and the poor are becoming poorer day by day. The rich people rule over poor people as if they are the kings.
I even think if people understand the importance of everyone treated equally with equal respect that day is not far when both men and women are walking together towards success and we have already made a start.
Nowdays women have gone into politics and earlier only men were able to go to space but now in every mission even women are included. People have gained more and more respect for women for example as now in a local bus some seats are already reserved for ladies.
When men can work in factories even women can and they are in multinational companies as they have the same willpower and can do anything which men can. Rich and poor should also be treated equal as no matter if sumone doesn’t have money but he has a heart and should be respected equally as rich people as these are only people who have made our lives much more easier.
(CIE IGCSE Standards) Principal Examiner’s report:
Content: 4
Writing: 4
Grade: E
In question 2, the rate of errors is again high, and the unplanned nature of the writing is advertised by the opening statement ‘I completely agree as well as disagree.’ Development of points is by no means always logical, with paragraphs used only for obvious divisions. There is a definite understanding of gender equality issues, but expression and content are both highly flawed.
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